21 replies to this topic

[Darkreaper]

I hope pppls like my RPing!

[Zelimos]

...not at all....and this post goes to show something else too. figure it out

[Charon]

*Charon claims the 'Yes but could use more depth' vote as hers*

I've rethought this. If I'm going to say you need more depth.. seeing as how I seem to be the only person not voting "no" at this moment in time... then I should explain myself, and explain why I voted that way

Firstly, you're getting shot down in this poll, and perhaps, by placing a poll, you were asking for it... but no one, and I mean no one should be shot down by people for trying something new

I like your rp-ing, because you're trying.
Please understand that with this post I am merely making suggestions, not trying to argue at all... because I don't do that ^^
You can feel free to disregard anything I say here as completely pointless if you chose... and some people frequently do

One little problem I have is the layout... it all runs together, and its just personal preference biasing me here, but I feel it would be better if you spaced out your conversations a little more
The other thing is that both yourself and SpiderSic are posting for multiple characters (Which is fine) but also each others characters, which seems... well, very strange to me.

To your credit neither of you seem to mind...
but it also leaves me with the uneasy feeling that you are both the same person... and if you are both the same person, then you need some practice in making people think otherwise... and some more people in your rpg ^^;;

If you are not the same person (and I hope you are not ^^) I apologise... but that is the impression currently being given.

Your characters also have the awkward ability to know, through your own dialogue, things they have not been told :s
(for example, you as the narrator say that Thorn's Xion form is a human paladin... and without Thorn ever mentioning that fact to Smiley, she wishes to see his transformation)
Again... this isn't truly a problem per sae... just something a little awkward for the reader (or at least, for me ^^)

About the characters- you each have a good range of characters and you have put thought into them, but at the moment nothing truly distinguishes them from each other.
I would suggest you take some time to paint a picture of your characters... what they look like, how they move, how they act... as well as putting thought into the story

Again to your credit, both you and your fellow poster both seem interested in the story. You have given it thought, and to have been planning your characters pasts and motivations.
There's this idea of Xion forms... which to me, as an outsider, could use a note of explanation... but its a good idea and I look forwards to seeing how it develops.

Please, keep going. I like reading, and I look forwards to reading more of your rp.

Edited by Charon, 10 May 2004 - 01:09 AM.

[Penguin]

I said no it needs better everything, because I hate these topics.

[jurian]

stop making polls about yourselves

[Darklin]

Jackarseole mon tufu!

[Zelimos]

I said no it needs better everything, because I hate these topics.

YOU BROUGHT THIS UP FROM MAY 10th?????? MY GOD!!!

[Charon]

I said no it needs better everything, because I hate these topics.

YOU BROUGHT THIS UP FROM MAY 10th?????? MY GOD!!!

Ah, I feel the need to defend him... don't know why but I do.

It wasn't him- someone else dragged it up to the top of the forum by voting in the poll. It was drifting around long before Penguin chose to post his distain ^^;;

[Penguin]

yup

Edited by Penguin, 11 September 2004 - 01:19 AM.

[Darklin]

Lol, i now feel the need to drag up topics from like January, just to piss him off

[Zelimos]

Why would i be pissed off. I'd just let the rest of the community flame you instead.

[Darklin]

They cant flame me, im too adorable

[jurian]

They cant flame me, im too adorable

that's what you think

[Marko_Polo_Jr]

I hope pppls like my RPing!

Now we don't.

[Darklin]

They cant flame me, im too adorable 

that's what you think

Nah thats wot i know

Edited by Darklin, 11 September 2004 - 03:54 PM.

[Penguin]

They cant flame me, im too adorable 

that's what you think

Nah thats wot i know

^insert flame here^

[Darklin]

Omg mean!

[Cule]

[jurian]

Omg mean!

i thought you were inflamable?

[Darklin]

Shat up

[Teh_Fluff]

*lends FooFoo his anti-flame suit*
I think it still works

[Zelimos]

*lends FooFoo his anti-flame suit*
I think it still works

dude..... what the hell....this thread was started in MAY

Edited by Zelimos, 25 November 2004 - 02:06 PM.