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[Crazy_Chic]

I am a prisoner of war
A silent infidel
A tormented soul
This war is not an earthly battle
Nothing made by man
But an inner war
Of mind, heart and body
My journey through life seems more an assignment
and though I want to stop
I remind myself,
You cant just stop living
'Cuz then you stop giving
and when you stop giving,
Life isn't worth living
This war rages on
Emotions step in.
But soon they too become captive.
I drift between them to make certain they're still there
And then to my horror,
I forgot love
I search for some feeling
But dont find the right one,
My life suddenly hit me
This dark lonely cell
One door and one window
each holds one promise
So I peek out the window
What a beautiful site!
Green hills and blue rivers!
Pure light from above
I want to be there
and live life like that!
So i run to the door
and push with my might,
It did not come easy
But was well worth the fight
I turn back and look at my dank, musty cell
And relise that I had built it for me.
The walls were just words, hardly sturdy at all
The door was just feelings and with a push it fell
That whole cell fell down
With just a few small shoves
The thing i had made for myself was gone
So now here I stand
In this lush green plain,
Were Hope runs like a river
And the soft breeze of love,
Blows the green grasses of life
I know it will rain
And probably storm
But I know I can get by it
Come what may
Because now i am stronger,
I have found day.
and so my war ends
And I am at peace
For i have found freedom
For a time at least.

Edited by Crazy_Chic, 19 July 2006 - 04:02 PM.

[Gnarkill]

[Crazy_Chic]

Wats that supposed to mean?

[Crazy_Chic]

wat the flip is up wit nm?

[deadman]

Eh, just ignore the rude comments. They are good poems. That's what you get out of nightmist now.

[alone]

Completely the wrong place to look for good or constructive comments on anything you write. I'd recommend http://allpoetry.com

[Dark]

Your a right wank, if gona dis it at least be constructive about it.

Edited by Dark, 19 July 2006 - 09:56 PM.

[Crazy_Chic]

Ty yall who r constructive, Gnarkill poetry isnt for every1 if ue not the poetry type not read it its not like i didnt tell u it was a poem

neways there up here cuz i kno most of u r my friend and that u have a life and have seen good stuff sp i wanted to kno wat u thought

[Redheart]

I liked this one
Ty for sharing
You should submit them to a poetry site
there are quite a few sites that accept poems.

Sorry someone with no culture had to ruin your post

[Gnarkill]

Actually I am very into poetry and to call this poetry is mocking real poets. as for constructive critisism , mine would have been longer then the "poem" itself and alot meaner the the picture I posted, so get some humor and stop being whiney please. k thanks.

Id also like to add that its pretty funny you say people have no "culture" beacuse they dont like a single poem, did you see me say anything on the last one she posted? or do you know me personally? no? ok thats my opinion good day

Edited by Gnarkill, 20 July 2006 - 04:05 AM.

[xvision]

Actually I am very into poetry and to call this poetry is mocking real poets. as for constructive critisism , mine would have been longer then the "poem" itself and alot meaner the the picture I posted, so get some humor and stop being whiney please. k thanks.

Id also like to add that its pretty funny you say people have no "culture" beacuse they dont like a single poem, did you see me say anything on the last one she posted? or do you know me personally? no? ok good day

thank God we don't.

[Gnarkill]

Mhm I'll second that.