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[TórtúréÐ Ésséñçé]

SANITY

Silent In My Sanity

I live safe inside my cell
In the darkness that surrounds me
I see my own special hell


I let you win,you come on to me
And your so fucing brave
A chewed out lighten candle
fell into my cold and empty grave
Somewhere in your worthy mind
Tell you this is what the people need
Doing all that nuts on me
And leave me here to bleed


Cradle falls, Unholy walls...

Silent In My Sanity

I live safe inside my cell
In the darkness that surrounds me
I see my own special hell

Comfort in my suffering
Feeling warm inside this pain
Before I was coming down on me
I come on down again

You woke me out my secert grave
you let your pretty world in


Cradle falls, Unholy walls...
fall...

Now you're in my world
Did you scream it'd be so small
My little box was perfect
'Til you destroyed it all
My Sanctity of sorrow gone
Forever in its place
The sacred sweet of you
Is all that's left to taste

Feeling claustrophobic
Now my world is closing in
Subtle retribution

Where I am and where I've been
I'll take you to a place
You never knew could be
Curled up, In my little box.

Cradle falls, Unholy walls...

[TórtúréÐ Ésséñçé]

Please State Your Comments about my song, this is one of many songs i have written this si fairly new aswell i'm jsut asking the people of nightmst what they think of it and if its any good.



Thanks Tons xoxo

Michelle

Edited by TórtúréÐ Ésséñçé, 14 October 2004 - 03:22 AM.

[Darklin]

You double TOPICED.... loosur

[Ryuku]

It's nice, but are you sure the person is sane? o.o

[Darklin]

It's nice, but are you sure the person is sane? o.o

He posted his topic -twice-, i think hes a spethal ed

[sayadin]

what kind of music should be in the background? nu-metal with a touch of goth?? or alternative

[Thrice]

Something like Tool/A Perfect Circle would fit it. Or As I Lay Dying/Poison The Well(One of their slower songs)

[TórtúréÐ Ésséñçé]

1) i am female

2) I accidently double posted due to lag

3) the background music is satanic like Icp or SLipknot considering i have been working with my friend on the music part and setting it up that way and finding that the music for background if you find the write singer(my friend hits it just right when he sings it) ismor satanic/gothic.

4) i wrote it while depressed about breakign up with my boyfriend which in cases wasnt hard yet made me feel the urge to write so i wrote this song. So all i ask now is for your opinions on if its good to you guys or not, i'll try to find a way to get it recorder so you guys can hear it yourselves after it is song and music made for it.(give or take 3-4 weeks)

[Darklin]

1) i am female

2) I accidently double posted due to lag

3) the background music is satanic like Icp or SLipknot considering i have been working with my friend on the music part and setting it up that way and finding that the music for background if you find the write singer(my friend hits it just right when he sings it) ismor satanic/gothic.

4) i wrote it while depressed about breakign up with my boyfriend which in cases wasnt hard yet made me feel the urge to write so i wrote this song. So all i ask now is for your opinions on if its good to you guys or not, i'll try to find a way to get it recorder so you guys can hear it yourselves after it is song and music made for it.(give or take 3-4 weeks)

Ok fine, i apoligize for calling you a man and satanic looped in the head retard, song lyrics look purty good

[Squee]

I'd enjoy listening to this song.

[TórtúréÐ Ésséñçé]

Thanks Squee

[sayadin]

its awesome... so you are going to be the singer of the band or just write them lyrics...

[TórtúréÐ Ésséñçé]

I write all the song's for the band and i play the drums. And we are getting a recorded deal here soon with Eternal Records which is awesome IMO, This is my First true band i've been in that's got noticed. So we are putting all the songs together for our first Demo, Plus we got the background music and Vocals for Sanity done, once i figure out how to put it on a .wav for windows media i'll post link to listen to it.

[Stitched]

Hun your amazing at writting songs =p back round music sounds like avenged sevenfold or poison the well/alexisonfire style thrice who u ingame?

[Cule]

Its shyte when you play it, im sure of it

[Lord Zelimos]

Lyrics are good but it's kinda Emo

[Squee]

As opposed to not being written about emotions? o_O

If you don't write about emotions, what exactly is left to write about? I don't write songs or even poetry for that matter but I now for a fact that if you want something that will really get through to your readers/listeners, you HAVE to put emotion into it. It's the only thing that people can relate to when you get down to it.

[Darklin]

Well not really... cause the rubber duckie song does'nt have emotion, yet i can still relate to it. Same goes with the cream puff song and the phone song and the no more fuzzy on my toes song. None of thems have emotion

[Cule]

omg ... i took the time to read it, and its total bull****

darkness that darkness this blablablaa ... the usual teenage angst shyte.

[Darklin]

I did'nt read it either, its too long

[Cule]

its not long ...

Edited by Cule, 19 October 2004 - 09:25 PM.

[Darklin]

Its too long for my simple mind to digest

[Redheart]

Kewl that must be Darkling's theme song

[Darklin]

Shut up, i hav'nt read the damn thing and i already have a theme song.

Elmo - Rubber Duckie

[Cule]

Suits you well